Thursday, September 19, 2013

Maui and the Sun

the       sun's lines look  kolleu      and are yellow like cheese. the lines    look like fire.  
 bi    ralph

The sun's lines look curly and are yellow like cheese. The lines look like fire.
By Ralph

1 comment:

  1. Hi Ralph,
    I like the way you have compared the sun's lines to cheese. It makes your writing more exciting. Good work. Have you been reading a story about Maui?
    Keryn @Ladbrooks


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